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20 August 2008 @ 02:14 am
[Fanfic] Sunlight - Donghae/Kibum  


Title: Sunlight
Pairing: Kibum/Donghae
Prompt: Flowers
Summary: To explain a few things before you read it - basically, the narrator has some type of mental disorder that has to do with some sort of extreme case of paranoia and social anxiety.
Warning: One of those pieces written at 2AM with minimal sleep.
A/N: To explain a few things before you read it - basically, the narrator has a mental disorder that has to do with some sort of extreme case of paranoia and social anxiety. I didnt give names or distinguishing characterstics so you, the reader, can read it in whoever's POV you want.



Sunlight streaking through the windows, the light almost blinding; it bleeds color onto the pale walls around you. Your head’s pounding, you can hear the blood pumping through your veins and the light footsteps, every movement of the clock on the left - tick, tick, tick, tick. Your eyes are closed, your hands are clasped over your ears but you can still hear it and you don’t know if it’s just in your subconscious or if you are really just crazy. Simple(but intricate at the same time, you note, your eyes following every line, shape and the subtle differences in color from one petal to the next) flowers sit on the desk next to your bed, the only thing that holds interest in the room to you anyway. The image of a charismatic, friendly(and strangely refreshing) smile, two boys who had coincidentally been assigned as study partners in a large classroom of 38. They never found out there was not even a single minute of studying that Tuesday morning from them - only whispers about anything to avoid the school work, his quiet laughter seemed warmer than the sun than floods through the room you’ve been in for twenty four hours a day, seven days a week. You still refuse to leave as if your life depended on it and it didn’t, but something propels you(his shy smile, dark bangs falling over his forehead as he introduces himself) and something else stops you from leaving every single time. The flawless white oak door glares at you, every carve and scratch in the door makes your eyes burn and the thoughts of the thousands of people past that door made it like that. Every obscene hand gesture, arrogant stare, every echo of footsteps getting farther and farther away from you, it’s engraved in your memory as a film is on a tape. Rewind, fast forward, rewind, and it never stops. He seemed oddly out of place and you couldn’t put a finger on what it was but he couldn’t be one of them. It intrigues you, more than every miniscule of details on the ceiling, more than the flowers he set by your tableside, and you must be insane to think he won’t leave you too. You don’t see him often - his image flutters by your memory but it’s there, so subtle but memorable when you close your eyes and picture him there. Arms wrapping around your waist, a laugh you might (never) forget, a goodbye(another that you foresaw as he hid tears with his left hand) as he sets down flowers on the table that is now blindingly white. Every single frame in your mind that he is there; it’s almost as if it’s glued to the back of your eyelids and you wonder if the image will ever leave. The only one that has never pushed or been pushed away, he comes back sixteen days later. At 4:27 that morning, you’ve left your only safety barrier from horrid things, horrid feelings, from being left behind - you leave it for him when he comes with an extended arm to you and a small vase of fresh flowers.

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when the world ends: hannieSTARrampantapathy on August 20th, 2008 01:25 pm (UTC)
For 2 AM, that was better than I can ever do.
I really..really...really liked that. xD
It was really easy to piece together Kibum and Donghae into that and everything.
8D
I LIKED IT.
write moar, I like your writing. :3
Janette: silly!Haejetlagged on August 20th, 2008 06:13 pm (UTC)
gashgjasgksagjk SOMEONE LIKED IT?

8D!!! <3 *hearts*

Thank youu~~ ^^

Buuut, I dont usually write much. Words dont come to me naturally so i sit there and type random words and phrases until i get somewhere with it, and IT WORKED THIS TIME! 8DD <3333

*glomp* 8DDDDDD

LOL IDEK WHY IM SO HAPPPY. YAYYYYYYYY.
🍷: SJ - sweet Sungmin :Dundomiel on August 20th, 2008 04:54 pm (UTC)
I like the imagery you used (particularly the "engraved in your memory as a film is on a tape. Rewind, fast forward, rewind, and it never stops" bit), and the almost nonsensical flow of thoughts from the narrator. I like that it's vague, too; leaves things to the imagination of the reader. :)

♥~
Janettejetlagged on August 20th, 2008 06:15 pm (UTC)
ahgjskgjhaskghsskk!!

YOU LIKED IT TOO?! LMFAO IM IN SHOCK. AND ITS MAKING ME ALL 8DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD because theres more than one person who likes it and ONE OF THEM IS YOU AHSFKAHFS *poke*

.. i dont even know. LOL <333333333 I JUST WOKE UP 8D!!

And thank youuu~~ <333333333333333333333

♥♥♥♥♥♥
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Janette: :o hae!jetlagged on August 21st, 2008 12:05 am (UTC)
Thanks! ^^
g_myzo on August 21st, 2008 07:04 am (UTC)
wow, i loved it. it has a kind of soft muted undercurrent, almost dream-like or surreal. i like your way with words~ ^^
Janette: *hugged*jetlagged on August 21st, 2008 04:06 pm (UTC)
Awwwww, you think so? Thank you! ;o; I'm glad you liked it ^^
i y a f a c e。♡: kihae // the melody over the noiseconflate on August 21st, 2008 09:37 am (UTC)
T-THIS ONE.
YOU.

;__________________;

IDK. THIS WAS SAD YET VERY VERY VERY BEAUTIFUL.
I swear, your imagery-- dsjdfjlds

Well done ♥
Janette: Kihae ♥ With youjetlagged on August 21st, 2008 04:07 pm (UTC)
Awwwww! *cling*

And AHGAGSJGK I GOT A "AGAJGSKGSKAGFAD!!"

...*faints*

Thank you ^^ <333333333333
ネス-ちゃん です~!♡: awrenjiryoheikakigori on August 21st, 2008 05:32 pm (UTC)
You don’t see him often - his image flutters by your memory but it’s there, so subtle but memorable when you close your eyes and picture him there. Arms wrapping around your waist, a laugh you might (never) forget, a goodbye (another that you foresaw as he hid tears with his left hand) as he sets down flowers on the table that is now blindingly white.

Awwww~ that paragraph almost broke my heart T_T_T_T_TT ...in a good way though. ♥
Janette: *hugged*jetlagged on August 21st, 2008 06:17 pm (UTC)
Awwww! *patpat*

Hehe glad you liked it ^^!~~ <3
Daya: braindeadfbunnie on August 24th, 2008 12:12 am (UTC)
UM... I'm a fan of crazy thoughts and such. I've written a few myself actually. AND I LOVED THIS.

GOING CRAZY IS SOMETHING I CAN RELATE TO 8DDDD;;
Daya: contentfbunnie on August 24th, 2008 12:14 am (UTC)
OH... AND IT'S KIHAE XD
Janette: dorkface 8Djetlagged on August 24th, 2008 12:25 am (UTC)
LOL aw thank you!

XDDD

Glad you liked it <333
nadseventh on August 24th, 2008 12:20 pm (UTC)
You don’t see him often - his image flutters by your memory but it’s there, so subtle but memorable when you close your eyes and picture him there.

I feel like sobbing when reading this, because Kihae is like this - they dont see much often and it makes me (us) sad..
*sniffs*

i love your writing
yes, write moarrrrr
(because kihae is lacking and good writers should work this out.. muehehe)
Janette: Kihae ♥ With youjetlagged on August 24th, 2008 07:12 pm (UTC)
AWWWW ;o; *gives you tissues*

Ahaha, aww thank you! 8D I didnt think I was a good writer but I can try~~ There's a whole bunch of writing stuff I did before floating around in my room somewhere, hmmm. 8D <333

Glad you liked it ^^